My friend's whole paragraph was about a young man who trying to call back his memories with his late father. This makes the story is good to everyone who reads and will bring us to feel what the protagonist felt too.
Something that I like in this paragraph:
- The figurative language that used in the sentences are cute and it makes me trying to imagine what the writer try to tell us about.
- The writer used simple sentences, words and some of the situations are really happen in real life that somehow tell the reader to appreacite more about life.
- Another thing is, the writer makes the readers think that even we had lost someone who are important to us, we should not forget the memories about them. because sometimes, it will give us motivations to be better.
Something to improve in this paragraph:
- The writer need to improve his grammar and some of his choices of words.
- The choices of font, the font he used will caused the readers confused because the comma and the fullstop look just the same.
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